Harry! I like how you have linked your magazine to those that are already being produced, it is also a great thing that you have used similar photographers as it really helps the reader have an idea of the magazine that you are trying to create. I would pay £2.00 as your target market is not something that I would be drawn towards. To improve, what will you do to make sure your target audience read/ buy your magazine, add a couple of words to correct this :-)
Harry, you have clearly illustrated you are making an electronic magazine. However, I believe you could make this presentation more effective by using persuasive vocabulary as well as linking it to the content in your magazine. I would pay around £2.50 for this magazine from what your presentation has indicated.
Hello Harry. I like your blog as it clearly states who has influenced you to choose the genre you have. Also you are very clear on the target market you intend to attract. I would consider paying about £3.00 for your magazine. To improve I suggest that you think about the price you would want to sell your magazine for and include this.
I like how you have clearly stated which magazines have inspired you. This is effective because it lets us know as readers how you aim your magazine to look and/or include the music genre's of the magazines. I also like how you've shown us relevant photographers. This is effective because it tells us what you aim your photo's to look like perhaps. I would be willing to pay £2.00 for your magazine. To improve, use words which you aim to look like and perhaps consider adding music to your pitch. Both of these will keep readers more interested whilst watching.
I like how you have been clear throughout the pitch, it shows you know exactly what your heading for. I also like how you've used a mixture of words and images. i would pay around £3.00 for your magazine as it looks different to other magazine types which makes me want to look inside the magazine to see what its like.
I like how you have connected your images to your chosen words, this gives me and your audience a good understand of what you're trying to create. I would pay £3.00 for your magazine. To improve, think about adding some example music to your presentation.
Harry! I like how you have linked your magazine to those that are already being produced, it is also a great thing that you have used similar photographers as it really helps the reader have an idea of the magazine that you are trying to create.
ReplyDeleteI would pay £2.00 as your target market is not something that I would be drawn towards.
To improve, what will you do to make sure your target audience read/ buy your magazine, add a couple of words to correct this :-)
Harry, you have clearly illustrated you are making an electronic magazine. However, I believe you could make this presentation more effective by using persuasive vocabulary as well as linking it to the content in your magazine. I would pay around £2.50 for this magazine from what your presentation has indicated.
ReplyDeleteHello Harry. I like your blog as it clearly states who has influenced you to choose the genre you have. Also you are very clear on the target market you intend to attract. I would consider paying about £3.00 for your magazine. To improve I suggest that you think about the price you would want to sell your magazine for and include this.
ReplyDeleteI like how you have clearly stated which magazines have inspired you. This is effective because it lets us know as readers how you aim your magazine to look and/or include the music genre's of the magazines. I also like how you've shown us relevant photographers. This is effective because it tells us what you aim your photo's to look like perhaps.
ReplyDeleteI would be willing to pay £2.00 for your magazine.
To improve, use words which you aim to look like and perhaps consider adding music to your pitch. Both of these will keep readers more interested whilst watching.
I like how you have been clear throughout the pitch, it shows you know exactly what your heading for. I also like how you've used a mixture of words and images. i would pay around £3.00 for your magazine as it looks different to other magazine types which makes me want to look inside the magazine to see what its like.
ReplyDeleteI like how you have connected your images to your chosen words, this gives me and your audience a good understand of what you're trying to create. I would pay £3.00 for your magazine. To improve, think about adding some example music to your presentation.
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